Talk:Shirubia Wakaruni/@comment-24132811-20131107180302

Thank you for sharing your OC with us.

Since this is, based on your comment below, your first OC ever, I wanted to ask you -- have you ever heard of Mary Sues? The reason I ask is because your OC has nearly every single Mary Sue trait in existence and it makes your OC difficult to identify with, hard to believe, and hard to like.

There's a very long list of things that should be addressed with regard to this character to help her improve, but you'll probably figure out some of them really fast if you take one of the Mary Sue litmus tests that you can find on Google. There's a ton of information about Mary Sues and why they're bad, too.

I have to go to work now, so I won't say more than this unless you ask me for more details. I can reply later this evening, if you'd like. As one author to another who understands how much we love our OCs and want our OCs to be loved by our readers, please learn about Mary Sues and reconsider this OC.