Talk:Ayaka Chouwa/@comment-87.219.67.182-20120801222701

Hello! I have read the whole thing and as such, I felt I ought to leave a proper review.

First of all congrats on the obvious amount of effort and research you have put into Ayaka! I can see the love you put on your baby lol. Also, after reading other people's comments (I'm such a stalker) I also have to congratulate you for being so mature and humble to people's critiques/suggestions.( And omg thank you for giving her small boobs that correspond to her frame. Seriously.)

On another note, if you do allow me, I think there are two things that can be improved (obviously this is only my opinion). The first one are the few flaws in her personality. While she is supposed to be good natured, even the best of people( AKA everyone) have some degree of selfishness and some sort of confidence issue (either over-confidence, which would be realistic for a prodigy, or lack of confidence, for example moments where she questions her faith).

To be honest, when your oc truly becomes alive, it chooses it's personality and flaw on its own ( or is just me going nuts?), so just give it time and you'll see how some defects just fit naturally.

Another thing which somewhat bothers me are her outfits (but honestly, they are so hard to do properly I don't blame you at all). For some reason they don't strike me as if they belong to the naruto world completly. (Mostly the pre-shipudden obi's huge ribbon and the shipuddens's gloves and shoes) Were her outfits somewhat inspired by other shows?That might be the cause.

Sorry for the long review and take care!

P.S My oc happens to be hemophiliac too and I thought (after doing research)  that the hereditary types of hemophilia (A and B) could only affect males, despite females being able to be carriers. After reading about Chii and Chizu I'm seriously worried that I misunderstood everything I researched lol.