Talk:Ryuun Shukiro/@comment-24241124-20141012153957

So, notes on backgroung for you:

-The massacre sounds too much like the Uchiha massacre and there is no real stated reason for it. I suggest changing it or going into more detail cause right now its kinds out there

-WHY was his clan so hated?

-the new hokage "taking him in" seems somewhat far fetched. I sounds more like he "established protections for him". It wouldn't be any different than the way you described it, the new wording would just prevent miconceptions of Gary-Stu-ness