Talk:S/@comment-28602918-20161216120056

Hmm, so you asked me to look over him. This is what I think so far:

He's an interesting character with quite a bit of potential. I love the fact that he adopted Fū, though I'm curious how that came to be (Takigakure, for all that they alienated her would still not give over their jinchūriki easily)

Personally, I would either make him older or reduce the number of official mission on his record because if you take in account the years in the academy and the fact that he defected from Kumo, there just wouldn't be time for that amount of missions.

In terms of his personality, it's a nice change to see someone so concerned with the welfare of others and actually like kids. Lol genin missions be like:

Teacher: Babytitting mission!

Teammate A+B: Nooooo

S: *grins happily, expert at diaper changing and bottle feeding*

However, you only wrote about one aspect of it, his concern with justice and general pleasant disposition.

You only recently began forming this char (if I am not mistaken) so this is not a big issue as you will have time to develop him. However (in my personal opinion-your char do as you wish dear) I would talk of other thins as well because he's human. Like, Idk but maybe he's impatient, or can be rather snappish when in a bad mood, things like that as well. Otherwise, he is a bit 2D.

Things like appearance (were you inspired by whitebeard XD?) and abilities seem fine. The latter really depends on how you portray that he learned them. Like was he born knowing how to do them all perfectly (exaggeration on my part in this case of course)

He also seems really adept at ninjutsu and taijutsu so maybe he won't be as good at genjutsu? I like the fact that you mentioned how a faster or physically stronger opponent can overpower him in close combat, it makes a lot of sense. (bulk of his weapon plus general mass would make him slower unless enhancing speed like the raikage) Well, that's me for now. That's what I think but this is your character dear so you make whatever decisions you want ^^