Talk:Kaito Tora/@comment-24132811-20131106125700/@comment-24132811-20131107063234

You’re welcome! Thank you for being so receptive to feedback. If/when you have time, please feed back on my OC, too?

Let’s see…

- I think that the elusiveness works. After all, we’ve never heard about this nation in canon and the lack of reference can be plausibly explained by their elusiveness and unwillingness to participate in international politics. You should keep this quality. When you have time, maybe you could make a Wiki page for the Country of Beast so that you can explain more about this. You can include any cultural peculiarities and then on Kaito’s page, reference those peculiarities that shape his perspectives and behavior.

- I understood clearly that you weren’t isolating him, but many, many people tend to read too quickly while not thinking critically about what they’re reading. The result is that they will immediately assume that you mean he’s the only one. Maybe this sentence could be tweaked a bit to say something like, “Kaito has been searching for other survivors, but has met no one. Recently, he’s begun to think he’s the only one left.”

- Yes, Summons can be self-taught. I’ll agree there. But Jiraiya didn’t pull his parent’s Summon, did he? He pulled an entirely new one. For me, the coincidence of pulling a parent’s Summon is too strong to be believable. Naruto did pull Jiraiya’s, but didn’t the boss toad refuse to contract with him? His kid toads did it instead. My memory isn’t that clear. Anyway, other people may feel differently about this detail.

- This is the hardest one of all. Realistically, only time and a series of events would change hatred that profound, if it could at all. A single incident – let me get back to you.

