Talk:Tsubame Shimura/@comment-35391058-20180424023722

Hello Otamari,

Your character has a lot of potential for sure! :) I really like her appearence! She even, kind of reminds of young Danzo in her profile pic! :) I would suggest adding at least one image of Tsubame in her casual attire, that would complete the "appearance part" of her character :) Her background is interesting, but not complex and specific enough... Try to add some specific facts and examples of her behaviour in the past or present. That's more effective and convincing than just general description of her personality. I'm also very interested in the other characters associated with her like her parents and her grandma (who intrigues me the most! Is she the wife of Danzo?). Try to expand on her relationship with Danzo, maybe write about how they feel about each other and what they mean to each other. That would bring new dimension to the Danzo character as well! :) All in all I see a lot of potential for this character and I hope you make a great character out of her!

P.S. If you need any help with her character I'd be happy to help! Good Luck!