Talk:Hyuga Hitomi/@comment-5853484-20131130220232

I like what you have of her so far. It's a bit strange for a Hyuuga to be in Sunagakure, but fairly believable with your story. I enjoyed how you changed up her fighting style making it fairly different from the traditional Hyuga way and the fact that she doesn't like using her Kekkai Genkai is a nice twist. Her personality was nicely balanced with positive and negatives and I enjoyed that she wasn't the traditional "everybody loves me" OC. What I really like about her though is despite her posessing the traditional "Mary Sue" traits of being from a big clan and a canon character's sister she isn't one.

I do have a few questions about her though, nothing bad just things that aren't there, though considering she's incomplete I understand that they may be filled in when you're done.

1. What's her relationship like with her adopted/blood brothers? You didn't really mention Akihito and Neji either.

2. How did Konoha react to one of their valuable bloodlines being in another village? Didn't they notice during the Chunin Exam, with her clear Hyuga features? Did it cause problems for Suna or Hitomi? Did no one from Suna recognize the famous kekkei genkai or did they purposely ignore it?

3. Did Hitomi test in a different Exam from Naruto and the others? Because if so her Chunin Exam wouldn't be in the Chunin Exam Arc due to the ages. Unless that is an arc from the fanfiction, which renders this question useless.

4. When did she discover her ancestry and her kekkei genkai?

5. Did her father ever look for her? Or her uncle? And was Neji aware of her birth?

6. Why is she currently in Konoha?

7. What is the fanfiction she's in called? And what's the author name on fanfiction.net and AO3? (I wanted to read it since she seems interesting.)