Talk:Akua Uchiha/@comment-5053045-20130111223522

Sorry it took so long to check out your oc! School has been such a drag recently...

 Anyhow, I'd just like to start out by saying CONGRATULATIONS: Your oc is amazing and I can't think of much to help improve her. If improving her is possible.

 But there is no such thing as a perfect oc, sadly. I'm just AMAZED at how professionally you pulled this off. It takes skill to make a good Uchiha oc, let alone a sibling of the only Uchiha's we really know and love. Seriously, I can't put it into words. You are a GENIUS.

 The only thing I recommend is keeping it toned down a bit. So much detail! It's alright as it is, but one thing I feel you should consider looking at is her appearance. Instead of saying " Akua has raven, almost dark black, waist-length hair that is swept to the side, save the bang that falls between her eyes. She was of average height with onyx-colored eyes; her appearance has often been referred as others as being similar to that of a  black rose,"  say something along the lines of "Akua has onyx eyes (or you could just say black) and waist-length black hair with left-stroke bangs that has a small about of hair that falls between her eyes." Just a suggestion; don't take that to heart. ;)

I also noticed that you often repeated the same things throughout this entire page, and your wording (use of commas) is a little awkward in some places.

The trivia I'd like for you to tone down a bit as well. Same with quotes. You don't have to remove them, but I don't think the "Quotes about/to Akua" part is necessary. X3 Just my opinion. But the trivia has stuff in there that isn't even all that relevant. It's great to have detail, but think about how the animators would be scrambling to find a way to somehow fit that information in, and for what? It's not really of mush use. Oh, you don't have to get rid of all of it, not even any of it if you feel that's best. :3

 One last thing. In her Abilities, I'd prefer you create separate pages to explain her particular weapons. You can link them from here to there in the infobox. If you need help with that, I'd be glad to be of service. :D

Seriously though, this oc is jaw-dropping. WONDERFUL. <33333333

And again, I'm so sorry for not doing this sooner. ^^"