Talk:Miuka Hogosha/@comment-5298475-20120803165514

Your character is great but she is WAY To powerful and has too many abilties. -First off she has WAY to many jutsus for someone of her age. In fact she had too many in general It seems like she has as many if not more than Kakashi and he's the copycat ninja. The only reason he can do so many is from his sharingan and years of fighting. Not even Tsunade has that many! Not even Jiraiya! Not even OROCHIMARU and it was his goal to know all of them.You need to lower of her jutsus buy A LOT. Lower ir ten MAXIMUM for her age, and if you want her to have ten make atleast 3-4 very weak or minor ones. If you want her to have all powerful jutsus make her only have 6 or 7. To be able do all of those as a 16 year old makes her god-mode powerful-Try not to give her more than two nature types. Three is a lot She doesn't need to have more than one to do different elemental jutsus. This affinity makes it easier to learn how to create and control the nature in question, although even with an affinity this process will usually take any number of years. Shinobi are not limited to the nature they have an affinity to, though. By the time they reach the rank of jōnin, most shinobi have mastered two natures.-She shouldn't be considered one of the strongest Kunoichi in the village at 12-16. Not even Sakura is considered one of the strongest Kunoichi and she's Tsunade's student.-THREE Kekkei Genkais? I would keep the eye and the kenjutsu since they seem important to your characters story and abilities. The chakra absorbing just seems random and thrown in there to make your character seem more powerful "But because of unknown reasons, they left Konoha and built a community of their own. "It's okay if this is unknown to the character but you as the writer should know  Besides this she is pretty believable. The friendship with Sasuke is believable since he pushed her out of his life during the Massace. I like the relationship she had with her brother, even though his death was kinda confusing. Her personality development is realistic and makes a lot of sense. She's a really good character and seems very well thought out and well researched. Just make her not god-mode powerful and she will be fine because the way you write her you make her seem as if she's stronger than Pain.