Talk:Akami Yuhi/@comment-5053045-20120618010853

You're just lucky I didn't say anything worse, like other people. And yeah sory, I guess that was a bit rude. I was in a "mood" that day.

Let's see here....

The main thing that caught my attention as to why she has Mary-Sue qualities is her appearance.

1, the natural red streaks in her hair.

2. Red eyes.

3. The outfit is TEEEENY. (the picture on the bottom, I mean.)

Now, for her past.

Her parents died when she was 10 and she tries to hide her sorrow. That right there screams "miserable", thus a mary-sue quality.

She was bullied. Techinically, that can be neautrialized, but simply putting "bullied" doesn't change much.

She's cheerful and bubbly, yet she had a terrible past. WUT? ._.

She adores Gaara. This is dangerous to say, if it is used wrong she can instantly become a Mary sue right on the spot.

She wanted to die....."miserable again." Be careful, its no fun to have an oc that everyone pities.

Gaara gave her a peresent. (OOC Canon characters. That's a no-no.)

Her abilites are a bit neautral....So that's good at least. :)

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I should remind you, if your oc has too much of its own plot, its a mary-sue.

I'm not telling you to GET RID OF these things. What I reccommend is finding a way to balance it all out. Besides that, she's an excellent oc; and again: sorry for my rude remark earlier. I dunno what I was thinking. :3