Talk:Ayumu Saruwatari/@comment-24131867-20131202165129

Hello there! I noticed you have a new OC, and if you need help constructing, I'd love to offer you some. I realize your character is still under construction, but there are some points where you need some extra info.

For instance, the rosario cross. I think you should probably opt that out, due to the fact that it wouldn't really fit into the Naruto Universe. Maybe you can have a chakra crystal of the sort, or even a seal.

In addition, why was her power to strong? Why was she not allowed to harbor it? There are a lot of people frm Naruto that have strong chakra, the only reason one would have their chakra sealed is if they were a demon host.In addition, why did it turn her hair red?

And lastly, peice your story together more, it doesn't flow like I think you want it to. If you need help, leave a comment on my talke page.

http://narutooriginals.wikia.com/wiki/User_talk:Yamiga123