User blog comment:Kazehime/Decision HELP!!/@comment-25156300-20150225233619/@comment-25156300-20150228051148

It looks fine, but I can see how the length is a problem. With all the chapter headings, it seems like there's more than their actually is, since each main part is a new chapter.

One of the things I noticed from a quick glance is you mention extra information in each chapter. It's things that are part of the real chapter and give general context, but they don't have to do with Kurei specifically, which is the purpose of those sections (similar to the personality section). If you removed these bits, however, each chapter summary would probably be too sparse, so the standard method would work better in that case. If you put the show/hide buttons, you may not need to thin it out, and just have each individual chapter hidden.

Overall, I think your main problem is in how you summarize. Though your writing style is well written and easy to follow, it is too elaborate to be a proper summary. It should be more concise, which is why the show/hide could be more useful for you, so you wouldn't have to change your natural writing style.