Talk:Kiyoshi Shizen/@comment-5053045-20121105234345

Wonderful as always! ^^

But one thing that caught my eye was this: "He became Chunnin, Gennin, and Jonin before the start of the series." If he was 16 during the original series, that would mean he must have been AT MOST 15 years old when he was a Jonin. Not even Neji was able to pull this off, and he was supposed to have the highest stats of the Konoha 11. Just saying, dear, this could be a problem....:/

Gosh, for a guy with "below average chakra," he's pretty powerful. Remember what I said about that wood release for Takashi? I'm applying that to this too. :/ Sorry, hun. Wood Release just isn't possible.

Another thing, if I were you, I would personally remove the one about the Kazekage rescue. I just don't think its right for someone outside of Konoha 11, heck, someone outside of Team Kakashi/Team Gai, to be in there... Just my opinion. ;)

Remember, this is Naruto's show. Try not to get your character so involved in everything. ^^ Its cool, but could you imagine trying to crunch all of this in a 20 min time-frame for these episodes? Just keep it simple. X3

Alright, that was all. Excellent oc. You are just BURSTING with originality. Toodles! :3