Talk:Yasha Tokasa

"Early morning, 8 o'clock..."
What a wonderful start of the day to find such an amazing OC! She's really original, and the story line is really good too- not your usual, cliche "Oh! Orphaned beauty seeking revenge!" thing. This is really great. I corrected some of the punctuation mistakes. I left the names in bold as they were because I suppose you did it so that when you make other pages it's easier to find them to link them... So really the only thing I would say is the punctuation; after a coma or a full stop (.) you should always use a space, like so:

"The magnificent, demonical flower was floating on top of the lake. Its beauty was mesmerizing, blinding and somewhat unconcious." :3

Sorry for the little lesson there, but it's a basic rule and makes the articles look nicer :)

Well done! <3

xStarcandy 11:56, June 18, 2011 (UTC)