Talk:Kiyomi Yuki/@comment-25156300-20191214070008

After reading through her page, the main points I see to comment on are the personality and ability sections. Also, I noticed her third set of stats are a large jump from the others. In general, the first stats would be the Chūnin Exams, the second would be the end of Part I, and the third is Shippuden (in case that affect what you had).

Personality: There seems to be some contradicting traits. She is short-tempered and has an attitude, but is calm and rational in battle, and also has low self-esteem. There's a bit too much range on her traits. There should be fewer key traits to serve as the overall view of her. The rest can be minor traits that have less of an impact on her character.

Abilities: The two main paths she has is Ice Release and Medical Ninjutsu. However, this is too broad for someone her age. If you look at the Konoha 11, they have a specific style that they become experts in. Lee with Taijutsu, Sakura with strength and medical, etc. Having Kiyomi split her skills between two unrelated fighting styles is more than most characters do. Realistically, one of the two would decline when the other is focused on in training.

Think of it like a percent. Being an expert in one area could be about 80% mastery. However, this would make any other skills only add up to 20% mastery (they don't have the time to grow them more). Abilities on similar ends of the spectrum could work off each other (Lee's 80-100% taijutsu mastery allows his pure strength or speed to be a similar %). But for differing skills, you could only get 50/50 at best, since you can't focus on both at the same time.

I know Sakura was the inspiration for Kiyomi, but if the medical side is kept, there should be more of a difference between the two. She may not have the exact moves that Sakura does, but her skills end up giving the same effect of top-tier medic + super strength. You could find a way to use Ice Release medically to make it more unique, but like I said above, her normal "battle" Ice Release moves would decline in return.

The only other point I noticed was that she can analyze attack patterns on the battlefield, but doesn't do well under pressure. These contradict each other. Of the two, the second one make for a more dynamic character, so I would say to adjust her analytical skills to better fit that.