Talk:Isato Mizu/@comment-25156300-20170131032533

I saw you were open to critiques, so I read through what you have so far. Since you're still in the process of writing, I'll just give my thoughts on his backstory and personality.

Backstory: Fairly interesting. It seems you won't be making him a ninja, which fits with the setup you made. The calcification is a unique explanation for a character with low chakra reserves. It's good to see more characters with that trait, instead of ones with 5000 techniques (my main character's got low reserves too).

For me, I've always thought of chakra as energy that everyone has, but only ninjas learn to use. So until the child goes to the Academy to learn to tap into the energy, it would be dormant (not flowing) in them like regular civilians. But for the sake of this story, it works well to describe it the way you did.

Personality: Law breaker, but good... so he seems like a Robin Hood style of character. In any case, coming flat out and saying he doesn't mind breaking laws is definately a route I haven't seen much in good guys. He stands out a bit more because of this.

So far, a good character. I can continue more as the page develops.