Talk:Mai Yuugure

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Ok, so the background has a clash: "Mi Yuugure is an ANBU squad captain" vs " after getting into some trouble she becomes a missing-nin". Secondly, she seems a bit of a child prodigy... there are too many things, defeating an S-rank at age before 15 seems a bit :s I mean, even Sasuke couldn't defeat Haku or Zabuza, Kakashi had problems with it, so that makes her look like an overly powerful shinobi D: I'm scared!

As for personality... I think it's ok, but there seems to be a bit of a hyper-Sasuke in her if you know what I mean XD But I think it will pass, if you fix the background a bit here and there.

"water, because she can't swim and will freak out if in a lake or river that has water that goes past her waist." <- No worries Mai, shinobi are like Jesus- they can walk on water! :D

After reading the plot as well, I think the ANBU squad captain doesn't fit in, since ANBU are usually straight A* students from the start... "Mai also can't do substitution jutsu and as a result trained very hard on speed" <- o_O ANBU without this is like a French fry without being fried!

"She seems to get along with kakuzu because they both like money and she refers to him as senpai" <- Akatsuki... WHERE THE HELL DID THIS COME FROM??¬!!J!KHjh XDD

All in all, it's not fatal. But it needs improvements- we need to stick to one point; Akatsuki, or being an ultimate Konoha hero, or a missing ninja, or a clan member, or this or that x_X it's too much in one place and that's a bit Sueish unfortunately. Secondly, a biiittt too strong for her age I think..... Well, not that bad since I see she has some gaps, so it's all good, just make sure that it makes sense when combined with whom she fighst etc :p

With luuuuv, best of luck! xStarcandy 19:27, May 28, 2011 (UTC)