Talk:Uchiha Katori/@comment-24131867-20131122191711

The first thing I'll tell you about making an Uchiha OC. Just because she has Uchiha blood doesn't mean you need to over power her. You may think this is harsh, but it's only helpful. Let me start from the top.

Her Background:

That was actually really believable. I mean, the fact that you mentioned she wanted to get stronger because of her parent's death was really good. However, that does not excuse her from being that one Uchiha who survived, (however, I understand she is Itachi's sister, so I believe Itachi felt the same way for her than he did for Sasuke), so I take that back...that is also believeble.

Good Job.

However, there are things that confuse me. The fact that she is rivals with Hinata, and best friends with Deidara. There is an age difference, in addition Deidara was in Iwa at the time, your character is in Konoha. There is no way your character could be friends with Deidara However, you mention she went on a missin, but that's still impossible. Again the timing and the age difference. She would be younger than Deidara, therefore she would not even be a shinobi yet, so she couldn't be sent on a mission.

You need to work on that, because as she stands, your character is a Mary Sue.

Her Appearence:

She is a typical Uchiha, good job. But again, you've over done her strength. You say she has the rennigan and the mangkeyo one in each eye. This is very unlikely, genetics DO NOT work like that, in addition you do not explain how your character obtained such special techniques again, making her a Mary Sue. In addition, her skirt having the Uchiha crest, it simply needs to be on her back.

RESATING, the fact hat she has the Mangekyo and the Susano, you need to exempt these qualities from her as they are highly unlikely, she just needs the regular sharingan, not the rennigan or mangekyo.

Her Abilites:

You claim she is super powerful and can use many S-ranked techniques. Again, a mary sue alert. Make it more believable, realistic.

She was trained unders Tsuande so she has super human strenght? Add some more beef into that, okay?

As for Her Kekkei Genkai:

I'd say just take all of it off...it's not believable, it makes her look like a Mary Sue.

Lastly:

How did she gain her eye techniques...And you say she's beaten many members of the Fuma clan...How? What techiques did she use, how did she encoutner them.

Lastly, do not make her a member of the Akatsuki, that is just forewarning. She already has too many Mary Sue qualities.

I hope this helped, it may sound harsh but I'm only being constructive!